20th August 2019 — Christopher Waugh
Conflict story
Weeks have gone by since dad left the house whereas mum is out any chance she gets. I almost never want to watch another minute of television again. Mum spends too much on groceries and new clothes well at least that’s what i hear dad grumble about although he would never tell her that. Abby doesnt seem to hear it, she is silent and still like a robot that is unless she is hungry. Before the fighting started dad used to sleep up stairs in mums room but now he sleeps on the couch , i know cause i hear his snoring all night. I tried to tell grandad what i heard last night but he is certain that
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Mr Johnson